Showing posts with label editing. Show all posts
Showing posts with label editing. Show all posts

Tuesday, September 15, 2015

In My Experience: Murdering Your Darlings


As someone who had been on the whole writing bandwagon for some time now, I'm more than familiar with some of the popular terms and phrases that float around the writing community. I've always wanted to do a series of posts on how some of these terms apply to me and what my experience is with them. So from now on, I'm going to call them the "In My Experience" posts, or IME.
 
Today I really want to talk about the phrase "murder your darlings". In short, it means cutting away the words, scenes, chapters, or even whole plots and characters that you love but that may not serve the purpose of advancing or deepening the novel. "Advancing" and "deepening" are obviously fluid words that can be subjectively defined. There are many posts out there that do the task of delineating exactly what is considered a "darling" and how you might "murder" them, and I encourage you to find them if you are still curious, because I won't be going into much more depth.

The selection of this particular phrase is inspired by the fact that I was lucky enough to have the wonderful Mara select me as her mentee for this year's PitchWars. Because of this, I'm a part of the 2015 PitchWars mentee Faceook group, where talented and awesome writers encourage each other and commiserate together. The term "murder your darlings" has popped up in the stream of FB posts quite frequently because the abundance of darlings is a common problem that writers face. Now their wise mentors are encouraging them to take up the knife and cut away.

So IME, how have I dealt with murdering the darlings?

I haven't, and here is why.

If you've read some other posts of mine, you probably know that when I first got into writing, it was through the medium of fanfiction. And if you have ever read or written some fanfiction, you know the prevalence of "fluff" scenes. Fluffy scenes are basically the darlings. It makes sense that the darlings and fluff thrive in fanfiction. Readers and writers already adore the original work or canon that inspires the fanfic. They aren't necessarily reading or writing the next best classic or looking for something "deep". I've been in a place where all I wanted to read about was two characters, whose relationship was never really explored in the cannon, just talking and doing cutesy things together. 

In my own fanfiction, I've written more than my fair share of fluff. My ability to write drool-worthy fluff was praised by my readers (who are the most supportive readers a writer could have), and this in turn bolstered my confidence in my general ability to write. Why not, I began to think, write a novel?

So I did. The end-result was a plotless thing that was entirely fluff. 

(Thinking back, this novel sort of got all the fluff out of my system. Nowadays, I rarely feel the burning desire to write fluff.)

I open it sometimes and reread some of the chapters. I still love it. But after finishing that MS and sending out like...one query, I shelved it because I realized that I had approached the novel as fanfiction, simply with my original characters rather than someone else's. 

Ever since, I've turned my plentiful experience as a fanfiction writer into a ruler, against which I measure how "fluffy" something might be while I'm drafting. This is how my fluff litmus test goes down:

Am I writing this scene/character interaction/character/chapter/(insert unit of writing here):


1. Primarily for romance?
  • This one is pretty self-explanatory because I think it's the main cause of too many darlings. From the perspective of a YA writer, I can see why I'd want to sweep the reader off his/her feet with that gorgeous romance. But it's all too easy for the writer to also get swept off his/her feet, and that's when we have scenes that are just there for the romance and don't do much else.
2. Because I really just want X thing to happen because I know that I can write it well? 
  • Example: A writer who is also a cook who likes to write random food scenes into the novel. This is not to say that you can't have scenes or an entire book built on top of cooking and food. You can if the food is central to the plot. IME, I do, however, have a tendency want to write what I know best or what comes easiest to me, which isn't always best for the story.
3. Solely to make myself, the writer, happy? 
  • This question sounds pretty bad. No, I'm not saying that your writing should make you unhappy. I assure you that I love writing, but I've realized that some of my best scenes are the products of some struggle and complex planning in my head. Contrast this to the ease of writing fanfiction--the fluff just pours out and can put this grin on your face and you soak it up yourself. It's probably why my most popular fanfic ended up at 140k words, a pretty big no-no for conventional YA novels).
I'll subconsciously run through these questions when I'm drafting if I suspect that something is becoming a little too indulgent in the novel. If I answer "yes" to one or more, I'll take a step back and examine if I really need/want this scene. Most of the times, the answer is no. If the answer is "yes", I'll try to weave in something else so that the scene can multitask. 

There are downsides to being really strict on the fluff during the drafting stage, of course. For example, I more often than not underwrite instead of overwrite. I might have to go back to develop things more. The romantic arcs of my novels tend to take a backseat to the plot, so sometimes I do have to go back and insert more romance, or fluff. But I find inserting fluff more easier than cutting it away. Maybe it's simply because I'm a pessimist, but it feels better for me to grit my teeth and get the bare-bones, essential parts (and often harder to write parts) of the novel down before I indulge. 

Lastly, I am all for darlings. After all, while fanfiction and novels are beasts of different sorts, they often both have the same goal: bringing joy to the reader. And so of course there is a place for darlings, just in moderation. 

Hopefully, through reading about my experience with those beloved and dreaded darlings, you might gain some insights on how you treat them yourself! I'd love to hear your thoughts on the phrase! And good luck and much chocolate to everyone who is revising like I am for PitchWars!

Sunday, May 19, 2013

Alpha Readers

The term BETA READER is tossed around a lot in the writing world because beta readers are crucial to bettering your novel. They're the people who you send you novel to after you have finished it and more or less mopped up the casualties boo-boo's in your writing. Granted, boo-boo's you never even thought possible are going to be unearthed by the wonderful eyes of these super-humans, but that's the point, right?

I, however, find another kind of reader extremely helpful to my writing process, and that is the ALPHA READER. These are the medics in the battlefield who watch the chaos unfold firsthand. Usually, they'll be reading as you write. For example, I had a group of 2-3 alpha readers who braved through INGENICIDE chapter by chapter as it emerged. There was a lot of cringing. And moaning. But there were also some parts of the story that were good enough to make it to the version of the MS I have today (v6!) and we discovered them together and had our little parties on the googledoc.

Alpha readers are great for a whole list of reasons, but I'll give you the two that make them especially dear to me:

1. They hold you accountable.
  (AKA I bug them incessantly with READ READ READ READ!)
No, really. When I found myself with writer's block, I reminded myself that no matter what, I had to get my chapter out there! So I could send out a fancy notification email to all my lovely alphas! With a oh-so compelling quote! Like this:

NEW!Ingenicide   Chapter 10- COLOR OF POISON

"I try to rationalize, make list of parts of me that I can cope without. But when I’ve taken all of me for granted for so long, any relinquishment feeds a black cloud of doubts. I need my sight. I need my hands, my feet. I need my brain to work."

See? I was really into it :D 

2. They catch problems early on.
Some problems you should not get hung up on as you are writing because they make you stuck in a rut. Those are the problems that you go back to at the end. Surface wounds. On the other hand, some problems are like infection. The might start small but then they start working their way into the core of the story. Usually, these are the problems that, if left untended, cause the major rewrite. While it is not guaranteed that a manuscript won't have to undergo a rewrite, alpha readers do lessen the chances. Reading along, they'll point out the most glaring of problems as you go, even catch the occasional typo and inconsistency that won't hurt to fix as long as you don't become obsessive about it. Ultimately, your first draft will be cleaner (though that doesn't mean you won't still have work to do!) if it passes through the eyes of the alpha reader.

Thank you and much love to my aplhies if you are reading this. 

I'm actually in need of alpha readers for my next project, IF LIFE WERE FAIR (click on the link for the description--at the bottom of the post). Comment with your email OR email me at joanart6 AT gmail DOT com if you are interested! Thanks a bunch!

Do you use alpha readers in addition to beta readers?  
 


Sunday, April 14, 2013

Querying: Magic Numbers

I love Query Tracker. It's like excel for querying.

As of this moment, I have 9 queries out. 4 agents were speedy with their form rejections. I really appreciate the speedy ones because if there's anything that makes me all fuzzy and itchy on the inside in a bad way, it's not knowing. I am an inherent pessimist at heart, so I can honestly say that I'm not upset by any of the rejections, even the ones from agents whom I really admire. I had already braced myself for rejection**

**Not promoting this as a great philosophy of life. Please don't be a pessimist :)

What I am worried about is the Magic Number. Call me stupid, but I'm convinced that such a thing exists. That number that tells you to step back. That number that makes you start doubting the quality of your query or your MS. That rejection after sending out a full (I have yet to send mine. I know, I should get on it) that makes you seriously consider whether or not you should revise...again.

There's a number floating around: 10%. Apparently, if you are getting a 10% request rate, you can relax and pat yourself on the back for being on the right track.

But if not, then what?

The average number of queries before getting a request is 65.

But if not, then what? What if I hit 100 queries? What do I do then?

I guess my point is that these numbers scare me. Maybe they actually mean something. After all, there are so many writers out there and so many bits of data about rejection rates and number of queries sent and whatnot that these number MUST hold some validity.

At the same time, I'm a writer, not a mathematician :D

Do you ever worry about the number of request you get in relation to the number of queries you have sent?


Monday, April 8, 2013

More Tools! Story Analyzer

Geez, she's on a tool-spazz, you might be thinking. And I kind of am. But I need all the help I can get when I need a boost from revisions, so here you are--tool #2, a pot of gold that I can't believe I just discovered:

The Story Analyzer

My MS is cowering in fear in some dark cranny as I drag it out onto my blog, because that's the only way I can show how the analyzer works. Sorry, MS. Bear with me. You're starting to look prettier.

 You start by going to this lovely website. Then you copy and paste 60k or less of your text into the text box, between the fancy computer jargon that makes no sense to me (should look like a bunch of weird symbols like this-ish: </br...>). I tried to select the do not read quotes button, but that screwed up my analysis, so the program did analyze all of my dialogue, but if you can get the button to work then do select it because the beautifulest of dialogue is not always diction and syntax perfect. Since my story is in first person, I also checked the account for "I" button.

I find it kind of hilarious that I'm just under the ratio for acceptable frequency of starting sentences of conjunctions. I feel like I use them quite often, so this merits a happy dance! Let's just hope that my ratio stays at .49 :D
 All I can say is...where the heck did the ?? come from?!!! Must go through MS. That is horrible. Really.

And not sure how I feel over that 13% -ly thing. Seems kind of high...
 Once again, I can escaping by the skin of my teeth for acceptable frequency of passive voice. I guess it's a good thing. It's not quite as bad as .49 out of .5 for beginning sentences with conjunctions.
 Wade in=weighed in? I did not know that--learning something new everyday. Hehe, I'll probably change the wade in to wade through.

The wordiness is no surprise. Completely guilty. I'll go back and comb out those redundancies.

 Viable is a fad word? I'll look up on that. In the heat of the moment definitely is. Oh goodness me.
I think that age level is just in the right range. That's a relief. And no sentences over 20 words. Does that call for celebration?

I strongly advise those who are in the process of revision to check out this amazing tool! Here's the website again if you missed it :)

(All stats are from my MS INGENICIDE. First person, 64k.)

Sunday, April 7, 2013

TV Tropes

A great writing tool that doesn't get half as much credit as it deserves is the website TV Tropes. Don't let the name fool you--TV Tropes contains tropes from all different sorts of medium, from plays to fanfiction to literature to anime, etc.

Sometimes, when I'm stressed and don't feel like being productive, I turn to anime (guilty pleasure, besides chocolate). Those days. I can blow out 10, 15 episodes, no sweat. Anime was actually the vehicle for my discovery of TV Tropes. The site does an amazing analysis of ALL the tropes in many animes. And I confess, I read them! Now, you may be asking why I'm such a dork, to which I'll answer 1. I am and 2. 50% of animes are actually very worthwhile if you have a taste for it, but the other 50% is hilariously bad, and reading up on tropes for the bad ones always result in great laughs. Reading up tropes on the good ones is also helpful for inspiration--tropes get a bad name sometimes (people call them cliches or stereotypes) but you have to realize that many things in writing are tropes. In fact, there are 7 basic kinds of plots (or 9, check me on that) and you might be like no way, but read them on TV tropes and you'll find that is it, in fact, true. There are 7 kinds of plots. Gasp! Does that mean we are unoriginal as writers? No! What matters is your execution of a trope, your own personal twist.

Like I said, tropes can be helpful. You can see which tropes were done well in which works (the database in HUGE. Most books with a respectable readership have a trope page), and which tropes were done not so well. I'm writing this post because I've come across a trope in my MS called ESCAPE BY AIR VENT. And now I'm sort of in a pickle. I can't seem to remember if I was being lazy when I had my main character escape by air vent, of if it served a purpose. Because if I was being lazy, that is a big no-no. Tropes are not crutches to use when you can't think of your own original twist.

*sigh* Now I must think of how to revise the air vent scene.

What tools do you like to use to help you write?

Tuesday, March 12, 2013

Hide me, please

Mind you, I'm half awake as I type this so please forgive me if I come across as crazy.

5:00 AM- Woke up.
5:01 AM- Checked my laptop. Sadly, due to obsessive compulsive inbox refreshing, I've eebn sleeping with it on my bed stand. Don't judge :)
5:02 AM- Inbox loading...
5:03 AM- My eyes pop out of my head. The revisions are here! The revisions are here! I obviously do not sleep with my glasses on so I basically stick my face onto the screen to see.
5:05 AM- Opening revisions in a googledo. Commence nail-biting, nervous reading. Because I have great foresight. I knew I was going to blanch.
5:10 AM-
5:11 AM- Suddenly so happy that I'm in bed because now I can just crawl back and go to sleep.
5:12 AM- Not really. I actually have to get up.

Still no good at managing my initial reaction to REAL revisions. Not line edits or oh-this-pacing-is-a-bit-off revisions, but real honest to god surgery.

I'll sleep on it :D

Saturday, February 23, 2013

Writers: beware the 3 deadly itches

Everyone knows the seven deadly sins, right?

But only writers know the three deadly itches.

Behold...

I. QUERY ITCH

a. Premature A- I'm not really finished my manuscript, but it I'll probably get rejected anyway. OR if I don't, I'll just bang out the last chapter. Just getting my feet wet, you know?

b. Premature B- I'm bad at editing by myself. You know what I'm going to do? Get the agent to edit with me!


II. SHINY NEW IDEA ITCH

a. The Detour- Hello idea-that-I-abandoned-a-while-back aren't you looking fine and fresh?

b. The Tangent- I better just jot down some ideas about the SEQUEL because I'm definitely going to sell a multi-book deal and people are definitely going to beg me to continue the story.

Dreaming is allowed in moderation :D

III. MANUSCRIPTUS PERFECTUS ITCH

Sounds like a Harry Potter spell. Oh, how I wish it were.

a. I'm Sure Not Everyone Has To Edit: This particular one gets to me right after I finish the first draft (I spent half a year on this story and now I'm going to spend that same amount of time editing--what if the world ends by then?) AND when I should be editing but try to amuse myself in other ways ;)

b. Celebrate With Chocolate: Self explanatory. Many, many premature chocolate fests.

Disclaimer: Personal experience does not necessarily apply to the above. Writer may or may not have been affected by one or more of the itches.

That was part 1 of the post. Part 2 is here, where I confess that I DID succumb to evil itch 2a, the tangent. Here's how it happened. I was surfing the writer community last week when I realized that I had missed out on Cupid's Valentine* contest. Darn it! I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE writing romance, LOVE writing kiss scenes, LOVE...

I'll wait for next year.

*contest was to submit a 300 word or less kiss scene

Anyway, I must have been sulking over this in the back of my mind as I was editing, which was not a good thing because I couldn't concentrate and I ended up writing this:

[Some background: This is me dabbling in book 2. The current MS is set from Sibyl's POV. Ashely (it can be a boy's name and yes, I will forever defend him :) ) is her love interest. I'm toying with the idea of making book 2 from Ashely's POV, if there will ever be a book 2 that is. This would not be a trilogy, just a two book package at most, so a second POV from the second most important character might work. Also, this is really short and not actually a kiss scene, so please forgive me.]


(make up whatever contest you so desire.)

The snow drifts around us in soft billows, flakes catching on her dark head. I blink away the ones that land on my lashes. “What is love, then?”
            Sibyl takes my hand. Her fingers tickle as they trace my palm.
            “A line,” she says, one finger stopping at the uppermost crease.
            “How is mine?”
            “Let’s see.” She brings my hand to her face and studies it. “You’ll love twice in your life,” she starts. “The first time, a pet. The second time, a human.”
            Her lips part to continue, but all that escapes is a puff of vapor.  “Maybe not a line,” Sibyl says at last. “Maybe a sound.”
            “What sort of sound?”
            She shrugs. “A note. A bird call. A laugh.”
           When I speak, my words also float on a cloud of white. “I know the sound.”
Her lips curl in a curious smile. “Tell me.”
I gesture for her to come closer, then whisper into her ear.
            “I love you.”
~
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Monday, February 18, 2013

SPAZZ: Editing


I just had a major spazz moment....

And it wasn't even to a request from a query (haven't send those out). I don't know what might happen if one of those ends up in my inbox. I might not be capable of typing a post, then. Heck, I was hardly capable of typing this post a minute ago because I do some really strange things when I'm really really really happy.

...Like the time I whole up the whole house at 3 AM when SAT scores  came out...

...oooor the time I found out I won a National Gold Medal for the Scholastic Art and Writing Award for a drawing of my good friend. I ran into the girls bathroom because I was laughing so hard that I had to pee and I ended up laughing in the stall, too, but that's okay because nobody was in the bathroom. At least I hope nobody was.

Now, I've just run 3 laps up and down the steps, done a bunch of jumping jacks, thrown myself on the couch, and laughed creepily. I really need to do something about the laughing. I don't think it's quite the right reaction of good news.

THE GIRL WITH THE GREEN PEN has agreed to help me crit my work! I had to send the dear dear Taryn samples of my writing because while I'm kind of in the situation of the POOR STUDENT, I knew the moment that I found her website that I would not hesitate to pay because I NEEDED HER WISDOM:

Because even though I'm the editor of the literary and art magazine at my school, I can't seem to do half as well a job on my own work.

Because I am a creature of momentum and editing kills my momentum and then I become majorly infected with a case of this is so bad! This needs surgery! I can't do surgery *shoves story into drawer*. 

That's what happened to MS #1.  Except I have a much better feeling about MS #2. Still, I don't quite trust myself to cut it open and not panic at the same time.

OK, so I really need to finish up my first pass now :D Tell me how you like to edit or if you prefer drafting to revising!